The idea of the guy living his life empty inside, work, bus, sleep, bus, work, etc... It has been done quite a few times, I still think your version has a nice dynamic to it, wish we could see some few "final concept images" to get a feeling of what it would look like !

the imagery works nicely with the song...i actually kind of like the text/direction notes. It mite look cool if you kept them in for the final video.