Ok. This is the first part of episode one. I need your criricism, in order to get better. There were impovements at the second episode, afgter I discussed with my friends, but I believe that hearing from others than my friends can inly help me. Here are some of the things that are problematic and which I tried to correct on epi.2 1. Walk circle (Rich. Williams "helped" a lot there). 2. "Slow" story 3. "Blanc" periods (music could help that) 4. Movement of the head (it's better at the 2nd part).